Crouching Tuna

Alright, I added a flashback to the first waterfall part, to at least give a reason why he's there. Lots of small changes here and there too, added and cut ...

Hello Here's a fantasy fiction for you, just the prologue though. Here it is Yay first post! cheers Tuna

Hello May I ask for a review please? It's pretty long but it's ok if you just comment on the first part, which is where the problem I see is. ...

Hello Can you review this prologue, which is also my first piece here? Here you go It's pretty long, but the problem that I noticed myself has something to do ...

Hello Can you please review my first piece here? It's just the prologue but hopefully it's interesting enough for you to take a look. Here you go I posted the ...

Thanks for the reviews again! @KJ I think the description part is the thing I'm having problems with. I added some descriptions to the first part, but I don't think ...

Hello! Here's my first piece here, only the prologue for now though. edit: So anyways, it'll be a fantasy, adventure/action, philosophical a bit, kind of novel. Please be as harsh ...

Ok I finally did Rascal's piece, asxz's is also done. The others, coming up!

Hello, I didn't come too late, right? Where did he go, and why leave me here? Change 'leave' to 'leaving' but that's the only way to move without causing pain ...

Hello, sorry for the very late review @_@ The others already picked out most of the critiques, so mine won't be as long. Gary slowly ambled down the curved, blue ...

Thank you for the review! I'm a bit moved :oops: The whole character changing thing is confusing, I know. I guess I should've asked in the tips section first, because ...

Hello there Please have a review on my first piece here, which is a prologue to a story called Book of Raziel. It's fantasy, a little bit of sci-fi, but ...

Hello! Care to review my first piece here? It's a prologue to the story called Book of Raziel. It's pretty much adventure, fantasy fiction with a little bit of sci-fi, ...

Hello everyone! This is my first piece here, which is just a prologue to the real story. I'm sorry if I have lots of mistakes, I don't write things in ...

Hello. I decided to make a quick review as this is the yet another story that caught my attention. Not too long, not too short, a beginning, and not many ...